I had been walking for hours ,my worn out feet were aching and I finally saw a ancient dusty house. I knocked on the door there was no answer, so I quietly peered through as I entered the abandoned, tiny house my eyes were drawn to an old dummy I looked away in fear but as I turned round it changed shape . It was slowly walking towards me (at this point I had no idea I would be lying in my coffin that day). I ran as fast as I could but I wasnt fast enough. BANG I had been caught.
Thats amazing Lyllia. Bendegedig!
Wow Lyllia !!
I love the way you have included brackets in your writing
I also think that your adjectives are incredible
Next time, I think you should use some more Top Secret Sentences
Amazing well done